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| SHE A Serial By Varalotti Rengasamy Episode I His method had worked in the army. That made the old man think that that was the only method that worked everywhere. He had an army of servants – a cook, a butler, a steward and a gardener apart from the outsourced security services. While he let Shalini go to work, he mandated that she should be back home not later than 9. The same thing applied to Rishi as well. If ever the couple wanted to go out to eat they should apply for prior permission and their return time will be set by the Captain. And every morning the entire family – Captain, Rishi and Shal – should be at the dining table by The menu was planned weeks in advance Any change required Captains approval. The printed menu for the week would be on the table. Rishi loved his father very much and always played along acting like a low-rank ,subordinate military official before the Commander-in-Chief. Shalini saw no point in going back to sleep after that heated argument with Rishi. She occupied the bathroom vacated by Rishi. Shalini showered, draped herself in a well-starched cotton saree and virtually ran to the breakfast table. The time was “Good Morning, Uncle” she greeted Rishi’s Dad. The Captain looked at his wristwatch pointedly for thirty seconds before reciprocating Shaini’s greetings. Shalini was upset. If the Captain had asked her why she was late in a casual tone, she would have given him pages and pages of convincing explanation. But the morose look without even caring to enquire the reasons for the delay was dictatorial. Even a schoolboy would not tolerate such a response, she mused. They ate their breakfast in almost funerary silence. Another impossible for Shalini before marriage. With only she and her father at their dining table the ruckus would be audible two blocks away. But here breakfast, dinner, sleeping, conversing, why even making love – everything was a mere ritual, a military parade, something to be executed with inhuman efficiency and impossible courtesy and manners. Shalini hated formalities while eating. She remembered her very first tea in this house, the day after her marriage. As soon as tea was placed before her she poured it into the saucer and swallowed the liquid with an audible gulp. Captain was offended to say the least. “Shalini, people of our stature do not drink tea like that. We take it straight from the cup without making noises like that.” Shalini turned red. Had it not been her first day in her husband's house she would have argued in the same way she did when her college professor made a similar remark. That was a time when Shalini was all fire. When she was enjoying her mid-morning tea in her usual style in the college canteen, her Economics Professor confronted her. “Did they not teach you manners at your school?” All the students were afraid that Shalini was going to give it back to the professor. But Shalini smiled at her. “Sorry, Madam. “ The Professor sat in the same table and ordered tea. Shalini started conversing with her. She had some tea still left in her cup. “Madam, I read about an incident in Mahatma Gandhis life which might interest you.” “Yeah.” “See Mahatma was having tea like us ordinary people, pouring it in the saucer. The place was “Mr.Gandhi, that is bad manners.” To which our Mahatma replied…” By that time the Professor’s tea had arrived. She took the cup to her lips and stylishly sipped the hot liquid. Before continuing the conversation, Shalini poured the remaining tea into her saucer. “Mahatma said, Gentleman, I am drinking tea and you are drinking manners.” Shalini finished her tea in one gulp. “Do you think I can improve on what Mahatma has said?.” Shalini turned to the billing counter, “One tea for me and a cup of manners for my Professor. I will pay for both” It would not have taken long for Shalini to talk back to her father-in-law on the same terms. She glanced at Rishi. His eyes were pleading. Shalini’s heart melted. The lines of frown in her forehead smoothened. She muttered “Sorry” It was just a day after marriage. And it was a defining moment for Shalini. She realised that for her marriage to survive she would have to kill a part of herself, a spontaneous, carefree spirit. Once a part of her is extinguished, especially the part that rebelled, would the part that survived still be Shalini? Or would it be just her physical self housing the mind of some other docile, domesticated animal? Last edited by varalotti; 27th April 2007 at 09:54 AM. |
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| dear sridhar, a good beginning, irritation is the base of revolution, even sometimes wind chime and roar but when it is a light breeze all enjoy and but when it turns into a storm they try their best to stop it, or block it but still it roars through them, razing everything in its path, am waiting with great anticipation, for the fireworks to start, with kind regards sunkan |
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| Dear Sridhar Sir, Waiting for this.Worth waiting. Very good beginning. When is the next Episode.Should we have to wait for a week? Meenakshirajan |
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| Dear Sridhar, Surprise, surprise....i seemed to have hooked on to your/our SHE very fast! Really enjoyed the first part, ....you are starting on the note which i am sure is familiar to every household......was chuckling at the intelligent bantering of Shalini even at the early hour! And the Captain, my God what a personality....a spoilsport.....i wonder how Shalini is surviving! But a very good start, and have built great expectations.....awaiting next week's episode !
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| Wonderful, wonderful. No other words to express my feelings about the first episode. Waiting the read the full story. Cant wait................................
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| Shubhamasthu Sridhar! A good start, a day earlier than expected. What pleasure:) The story has started off with a bang and an alarm. Hope the alarm bells don't toll too bad. The narration has a stylish and sleek presentation. Rishi comes across as endearing and Shalini seems to be already trapped. Captain is both charming and charmless! Charming because of his dedication and precision, charmless because he seems to lack humor. Shall wait and be waited upon by the oncoming twists and turns. Till the next round...L, Kamla |
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| Hello Sridhar You have set the ball rolling. The strict military background etched in a stark contrast to Shalini's carefree spirit. Perfect beginning to an interesting story. Sure would wait for the forthcoming episodes. Shalini seem to be a character on fire with her retorts to her husbands. Enjoyed their interpretations of the proverb "Early to bed..." Rishi's character is little subdued - very obedient son and sticler to routines. Let us hope that his character do gets prominence too if the story allows.
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| Dear Sridhar, A good start to the story. I liked the way you have brought the traits of Shalini. I think all women are like her before marriage, and we do get a little subdued after . However, i did find your characterisation of Rishi's father rather stereotypical of a military man. :icon_frown: Vandhana |
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