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Virginity Finally Sealed

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ramyakrish1, Jul 16, 2013.

  1. ramyakrish1

    ramyakrish1 Silver IL'ite

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    I was a Virgin, sublimely pure
    Like mother Mary, divine for sure
    Though my heart had skipped many a beat
    My legs had stood firmly on their feet

    As pure as the first drop of dew
    Desi Ghee from a chef’s point of view
    Honey from a comb gently plucked
    Mother’s milk hungrily sucked

    One fateful day, I lost my footing
    And was carried away by our frenzied petting
    Without a vow of “Till death do us part”
    My feet were now as weak as my heart

    Overcome by shameless lust
    And my moral virtues biting the dust
    With a strange mix of pleasure and pain
    I knew I would never be pure again

    For weeks and weeks did I quietly weep
    Clueless on a secret I had to keep
    Now, reflecting, I laugh aloud
    Oblivious to the mocking crowd

    I wonder why people get a migraine
    For willfully losing a membrane
    It is not a wound that has to be healed
    I hope this issue is forever sealed!!
     
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  2. varalakshmi24

    varalakshmi24 Silver IL'ite

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    Wow! That was a thought provoking hilarious poem!! Simply loved it!

    Superlative!!
     
  3. Quebec

    Quebec Platinum IL'ite

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    So real and lively........

    Its just so identifiable with.......

    Reading this poem of yours one can actually live the protagonist's feelings being conveyed......

    And this is first time i'm feeling a protagonist's voice in a poem......

    Maybe your way of way of expressing it i guess.......

    Thank you...... It was an enriching experience.........
     
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    swathiiyer Silver IL'ite

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    Hello

    A beautiful poem.... Lovely written :)

    Love
    Swathi
     
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    mahiramki Gold IL'ite

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    Kamla IL Hall of Fame

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    First of all Ramya, I have to thank Quebec for nominating this little gem of a poem to FP. If not for the nomination, I would have missed reading it!:)

    So well written and the subject! Yes, high time such poems are written and let's hope more follows from the pen!

    So many sing about the nobility of being chaste. What real chastity means is lost to everyone's understanding. Like 'Ram teri Ganga meili', can Ganga ever be 'meili' if not for the sinners who use her?

    I wonder why people get a migraine
    For willfully losing a membrane
    It is not a wound that has to be healed

    I hope this issue is forever sealed!!

    Need to applaud your above lines especially. We have seen innumerable films and read numerous news items where the girl invites death for losing her virginity. Much ado about nothing?!!:)

    L, Kamla
     
  7. ramyakrish1

    ramyakrish1 Silver IL'ite

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    Thank you all so much for your appreciation. I was forced to start writing by DH who gets paranoid about the regressive values in our society and ends up fighting. He also feels that the hypocrisy prevalent in our social system is a larger impediment to growth as compared to economic or political factors.

    I am presently planning to pen down a real life story about a friend whom I met at the club. And the above issue was being widely discussed. I have never written before but I do have a good critic at home. This has been a new experience for me. And your feedback makes it even more liberating.

    Thank you.
     
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