Dawn of Love!

awwwww very cute

Dear Mol,
The poem read like a soft whisper heard on a spring morning when the Sun is still getting up from the Eastern mountains. There is a sense of togetherness, no no a sweet sense of pathos, if this mofusil accountant be pardoned that oxymoronic expression throughout the poem.

After twists and turns I found
The road to love
Wondered how I’d tread
But you held my hand
And guided me

The very first lines were worth quoting. The road to love is quite narrow for there is only space enough for the lovers. And hand holding and guiding process is predominantly mutual. For if your beloved were to write a similar poem the words would not be much different.

Basking in the glory of dawn is another soft, yet subtly powerful expression which gives an idea of the ambience that surrounds the lovers.

As usual well written, Mol. If you want any criticism... well here you go. It could have been longer. But then we could never have enough of your words.

love,
sridhar

Originally Posted by Devika Menon

After twists and turns I found
The road to love
T’was narrow
Wondered how I’d tread
But you held my hand
And guided me

I knew we would surpass
All odds, so prosaic
In comparison
Love ruled
Passion supported
And we grew

And there it was
The shiny morn
We bathed in sunshine
And basked
In the glory of dawn
Bringing more hopes

Of a life together
Not devoid of thorns
But we shall
Tread carefully
Cause what we have
This treasure
Can never again be found...

Love,
Devika
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Hey thanks a bunch Ipshika:)

Glad you liked the poem.

Love,
Devika

Originally Posted by Ipshika

awwwww very cute

Dear Sri,

I must confess the thrill of reading your FB far exceeds the thrill of writing..:) This is an absolutely motivating comment and in your golden words well spun it is nothing short of a masterpiece in itself.

I am delighted to know this met with your approval..

Well now i have added something for criticism . My inability to reply to this earlier.. Please do forgive me for the delay... And yes its been my loss as had i read it earlier, i would have had the opportunity to savour the glorious words.

Thankyou so very much.... im deeply honored:)

Cheers,
Devika Mol

Originally Posted by varalotti

Dear Mol,
The poem read like a soft whisper heard on a spring morning when the Sun is still getting up from the Eastern mountains. There is a sense of togetherness, no no a sweet sense of pathos, if this mofusil accountant be pardoned that oxymoronic expression throughout the poem.



The very first lines were worth quoting. The road to love is quite narrow for there is only space enough for the lovers. And hand holding and guiding process is predominantly mutual. For if your beloved were to write a similar poem the words would not be much different.

Basking in the glory of dawn is another soft, yet subtly powerful expression which gives an idea of the ambience that surrounds the lovers.

As usual well written, Mol. If you want any criticism... well here you go. It could have been longer. But then we could never have enough of your words.

love,
sridhar

Originally Posted by Devika Menon

The road to love
T’was narrow

very well written.

Where WIND can not ENTER

LOVE only can definitely ENTER