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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by rgsrinivasan, Apr 10, 2013.

  1. rgsrinivasan

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    Seeing the endless form of Him
    Before me, lost in wonder I found
    That object when the light was dim
    As the sun was a dull crimson round.

    Along the waves it seemed to be
    Cradled and I was curious at first.
    "What could that black object be?"
    Questioning myself, I picked it to test

    Whether my assumption was right or not.
    As usual I was proved wrong again.
    It was a coconut shell soft but hard
    To break and I threw it back again,

    To the sea from where it came to me.
    I don't know who threw it before.
    For how long it was there in the sea,
    I know not as well and before

    How long will it be picked by another,
    Is also a question that goes without
    An answer like that question of whether
    I will be here or not loomed above

    Other thoughts to me at that time.
    Also for how long I will still have
    The desire to be here all the time
    Came to me too as I just craved

    For an eternity to be alive,
    Alas that shell came to me
    Again, sending a sharp knife
    To me and I longed to be free.
     
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  2. Pallavi4me

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    This is a master piece RGS. I dont have enough words to praise it.

    Each stanza show the much thought process behind it.
     
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    I am very happy and relieved to get a feedback for this post, Pallavi. Frankly I was a bit let down that it was not well received, but I also understood where my mistake lied too. Thanks so much for your appreciation. -rgs
     
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    Very many thanks NilaSisu. Very happy to receive a first from you. -rgs
     
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    WOW rgs...................:thumbsup.
     
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    Agreed Pallavi4me.
     
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    Thanks NEESHAH, for your continuous support to my posts. -rgs
     
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