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14th April 2006, 01:52 AM
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 short story dear friends here is short story with a difference ,by me.. click on the folllowing link to read the story.. regards sheela www.shawnolson.net/a/1266/ www.shawnolson.net/a/1267/. Last edited by sushdevi; 17th April 2006 at 09:34 AM. Reason: added one more link      |
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14th April 2006, 08:03 AM
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| I read it, Sheela ! Dear Sheela, Your story is beautiful & shows you as a sensitive person. The theme is very simple & you have played aound with words beautifully. The end is a little far-fetched ! So what - it makes nice reading & I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Love ®ards, Chithra. |
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14th April 2006, 11:22 AM
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| Gripping Narrative and A Wonderful End! Dear Sushdevi, I read your story with interest. A very touching as well as a gripping narration. Well, to be frank, I guessed the end. Because half way through I had a feeling that I was writing this story and thought fast how would I end that. Your end is good. Yes, it is unrealistic. Very few women would prefer to stay back from their children and grand childrend for a little bird. But we as writers are to concern ourselves with those special characters who will do that. The story shows you as a soft and sensitive portion. Good work. I have a suggestion for you, though. When you post a story in a website, divide it into a number of small paragraphs leaving some gaps between each para. That way it will be easy to read it. You may adopt it even if you are sending your stories to mags. Because often stories get rejected for things like poor formatting. I wish you all the best. You will surely grow into a good writer. Keep writing. Varalotti |
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14th April 2006, 12:50 PM
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| ur sensitivity coming thru.... dear sheela, read ur story....felt it was a little too personal mental involvement hope i am wrong u r so sensitive it just comes through....any way a good start and beginning hope some more to come...try a little humour and u see how it picks up....dont give up...regards..sunkan |
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16th April 2006, 05:58 AM
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| another short story Dear IL friends visit this link to read another of my short stories .. love and regards sheela (sushdevi) www.shawnolson.net/a/1267/. |
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16th April 2006, 07:09 AM
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| very nice,sush , Dear Sush, Iread your story. Your narration is very catchy.When you mentioned the auto accident, I was almost sure of the end. Doomed writer???A n interesting expression. Good work .Keep writing. Regards, Meenu Last edited by meenu; 16th April 2006 at 07:23 AM. |
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16th April 2006, 08:15 PM
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| sushi i agree it is different.... sushi, i do agree it is different...the narration though is a very sure kind i know u r made of better stuff so go ahead and write some more.....regards sunkan |
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