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  1. May 14, 2008 #1
    Devika Menon

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    AS I AWAIT YOUR CALL

    The sun kissed cheeks are so pale now
    The eyes once lovely, sunken deep
    The hair has lost all its glory
    These tresses don’t now solace reap

    The sun never tells, its time to wake
    Cause sleep has been a past
    Now I wake the sun up and say
    Oh nights shouldn’t such long last

    The eyes of strange men who surround me
    That you always teased in bonhomie
    They now penetrate through my corpus
    Hoping to revive a soul in me

    The waves still whisper your name
    While I walk along the beach
    The rocks carry tales of us in fame
    Cuddling in the arms of each

    The trees that once so danced with glee
    When you carried me in your arms
    Their whispers ask me as I tread all lonely,
    And my tears do miss your palms.:cry:

    As I look up at the stars and see
    You shining and smiling down at me
    I am angry that you walked so free
    When you promised you’d always be

    But yet sometimes as I look at your chair
    I hear my name as you say
    And I hope that place beside you up there
    Is where I shall someday shine and stay

    It’s been a tough life without you
    Laughter gives me much pain
    Each day that passes I truly rue
    Tell dear death now I am game.

    You once waited when we dated
    And said someday I shall too
    But then I never knew to what it related
    And now as I do, I await the call from you

    Yes I await the final CALL from you!!:cry::cry:

    Love,
    Devika
     
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    Devika Menon, May 14, 2008
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  2. May 14, 2008 #2
    uncannybal

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    Lovely

    Can feel the angst and pain of a loved one

    Santosh
     
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    vidhya parani

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    hello devika,
    it is a wonderful poem, really touching and makes me shudder to think of missing a loved person so much...your words are so graceful, each line feels so light...yet when i finished reading the poem, my heart became heavy with the agony of a lonely soul...wonderful, wonderful!
     
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    PoorniDaya

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    Hi Devika,

    I could feel the sadness of the soul who has lost her love, very well pictured the mind of a lonely heart that wishes for the partner's warmth. The wait while dating is a pleasure, but a wait of this sort is painful.

    You've done it well as you always do.

    Regards
    Poornima.
     
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    Devika Menon

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    Hey Santosh,

    Thanks for stepping in!! Glad you liked it!!

    Regards,
    Devika
     
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    Devika Menon

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    Dear Vidhya,

    Thanks so much for the fantastic FB.Got my morale boosted!!
    It is very difficult to live without the person you love and when the loved one departs life ceases to be , its more like death .... awaiting freedom from life


    Love,
    Devika
     
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    aproop

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    Dear Devika,

    reminds me a quote - death leaves a heartache no one can heal love leaves a memory no one can steal.

    very touching poem....

    warm regards,
    Anu
     
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    Devika Menon

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    Dear Poornima,

    Thanks a ton for the FB. You've said it very well. Thanks for the appreciation. Its pleasure to await life but to live without your lover ... is like death in itself.

    Love,
    Devika
     
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    roopadadia

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    Great Devika...as usual a well crafted piece from you.

    I have come across a few such people whose life has been a nightmare after losing their spouse. Maybe more so when children and relatives don't take good care of them.

    Also, this is the time when many of them realised the importance of their spouse...whom they had taken for granted when they were alive.

    But we have to accept gods plan.
     
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    Devika Menon

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    Thankyou so much for stepping in Anu,
    Thats a lovely quote. Glad you liked the poem!

    Love,
    Devika
     
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