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When you look at me !!

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Devika Menon, Apr 7, 2008.

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  1. Apr 7, 2008 #1
    Devika Menon

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    WHEN YOU LOOK AT ME

    When you look at me I wonder if you can see
    The undying love that I feel in me

    And then I see your loving smile
    And I know I am in your mind all the while

    When you stand by me I wonder if you can feel
    The way I tremble still, right till my heel

    And then I watch your dishy grin
    And I know how manifestly my passions win

    When you listen to me I wonder if you can still hear
    Those wonderful whispers that I once blew in your ear

    As I still feel its just so new
    Though its been ages since we grew

    Old together yet our love so firm
    Still so wonderful what a glorious love term

    Bathing in old age yet so strong
    How often does true love come along

    We’ve both been blessed with ardency
    What’s age got to do with fervency?

    I guess someday we shall be known
    Me for my love for you and you for that look you own

    When you look at me I’m glad we’ve yet one more day
    To love and gather together all that we have to say!

    Love,
    Devika
     
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  2. Apr 7, 2008 #2
    Vysan

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    Dear DM,

    That is a very nice one....

    Old together yet our love so firm
    Still so wonderful what a glorious love term

    Bathing in old age yet so strong
    How often does true love come along

    Great lines... Enjoyed... True love lasts till our end...
    Veda
     
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  3. Apr 7, 2008 #3
    sudhavnarasimhan

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    Dear Devika,

    That was a great poem on being together and ur interpretations onthe LOOK ! I guess only we women can think of all the meanings for the looks They give us.....ha ha! But very cute, ......i guess we do have the ability to look into their souls and understand that LOOK they give us now and then!

    "When you look at me I’m glad we’ve yet one more day     To love and gather together all that we have to say!"

    Loved these lines! Very good poem......Bow
     
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  4. Apr 7, 2008 #4
    aishu22

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    Dear Devika,
    This was a beautiful poem.You have penned it so well.Enjoyed every line of it.I guess only you can write such nice/beautiful poem for looks :)
     
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  5. Apr 7, 2008 #5
    Devika Menon

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    Dear Veda,

    Yes true love lasts so long infact even after the lovers are no more. I reminded of the famous song from Jaanbaaz,
    Har kisiko Nahin milta yahan pyar zindagi mein,
    khusnaseeb hain woh jinko hain mili yeh bahar zindagi mein

    Thanks for your comments. Glad you liked the poem!
    Regards,
    Devika
     
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  6. Apr 7, 2008 #6
    Devika Menon

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    Dear Sudha,
    Thankyou so much for writing in! Yes we are more conscious about the LOOK and try to interpret it better.
    I am so glad you liked the poem.
    Love,
    Devika
     
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  7. Apr 7, 2008 #7
    Devika Menon

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    Dear Aishu,
    From your comments I am almost compelled to start a new line of love called Lookalogy Big Laugh

    Thankyou so much for the wonderful words of appreciation.
    Love,
    Devika
     
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  8. Apr 7, 2008 #8
    corallux

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    Beautiful poem Devaki....Loved every word of it..

    Your poems come straight from the heart....As I said earlier & still maintain, hats off to your Muse....Bow

    Regards,

    Corallux

    P.S. I was worried I would not get your Darshan today, but you came out like a Full Moon in it's glory with this poem....
     
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  9. Apr 7, 2008 #9
    Arunarc

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    Dear Devika
    Wow another good piece from you. What a romantic poemBow
    Even though you grow old and fade but your love will always remain young forever.
    Wow each and every line has so much of meaning into it. Superb..........
     
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  10. Apr 7, 2008 #10
    Meenu Raju

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    Hello Devika,

    That was beautiful poem. Truly enjoyed every word of it.

    You have penned what one can only feel when hearing movie songs... Your choice of words too is great.

    Meenu
     
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