The first stars are visible in the sky and it is time to chew the fat about the day that just passed by...
The poetry bug has bitten me too!
Posted 10th March 2008 at 03:27 AM by Cheeniya
Hi all!
If this attempt of mine reminds you of the cat that stripes itself with a hot iron on seeing a tiger, dont laugh! I know this poem sounds like the stories that kids tell their moms!
The Love Yonder.
The car purrs along<?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p>
The sea on the left looks mystical<o:p></o:p>
The waves try to kiss the sky in a mighty heave<o:p></o:p>
It's their way of telling me<o:p></o:p>
That no matter how far you are<o:p></o:p>
You will always be within my reach.<o:p></o:p>
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The sun is blushing and dipping in the west<o:p></o:p>
Conceding defeat in matching the warmth<o:p></o:p>
Of my feelings for you.<o:p></o:p>
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The road ahead appears endless<o:p></o:p>
But driving is fun knowing you are waiting<o:p></o:p>
At the end of my long drive.<o:p></o:p>
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The rainbow rising over the sea<o:p></o:p>
Appears less colourful than my thoughts of you.<o:p></o:p>
When love reigns supreme<o:p></o:p>
The world looks as if it just had a shower<o:p></o:p>
Dressed up and perfumed.<o:p></o:p>
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How else will you explain<o:p></o:p>
The scent of a million flowers <o:p></o:p>
Wafting through the air<o:p></o:p>
At this time of the day?<o:p></o:p>
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The stars seem impatient<o:p></o:p>
To put in their appearance<o:p></o:p>
Not knowing they have no place in my heart<o:p></o:p>
Being occupied by the star of all stars.<o:p></o:p>
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<o:p>Sri</o:p>
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If this attempt of mine reminds you of the cat that stripes itself with a hot iron on seeing a tiger, dont laugh! I know this poem sounds like the stories that kids tell their moms!
The Love Yonder.
The car purrs along<?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p>
The sea on the left looks mystical<o:p></o:p>
The waves try to kiss the sky in a mighty heave<o:p></o:p>
It's their way of telling me<o:p></o:p>
That no matter how far you are<o:p></o:p>
You will always be within my reach.<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
The sun is blushing and dipping in the west<o:p></o:p>
Conceding defeat in matching the warmth<o:p></o:p>
Of my feelings for you.<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
The road ahead appears endless<o:p></o:p>
But driving is fun knowing you are waiting<o:p></o:p>
At the end of my long drive.<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
The rainbow rising over the sea<o:p></o:p>
Appears less colourful than my thoughts of you.<o:p></o:p>
When love reigns supreme<o:p></o:p>
The world looks as if it just had a shower<o:p></o:p>
Dressed up and perfumed.<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
How else will you explain<o:p></o:p>
The scent of a million flowers <o:p></o:p>
Wafting through the air<o:p></o:p>
At this time of the day?<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
The stars seem impatient<o:p></o:p>
To put in their appearance<o:p></o:p>
Not knowing they have no place in my heart<o:p></o:p>
Being occupied by the star of all stars.<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
<o:p>Sri</o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
<o:p></o:p>
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Total Comments 34
Comments
 |  Sri, Wow. Beautiful one. definitely nothing else looks beautiful or impressive when your loved one is your heart. |
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| |  Thank you, Shanthi for being not only the first one to read my maiden attempt at poetry but give me your generous encouragement. |
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| |  Sri, Is it raining poetry in IL ?The infectitious bug has bitten me too! See you in the dancing waves by the ocean See you in the scorching heat of the summer sun See you in the serenity of moonlit night See you in the brilliance of twinkling stars <?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p> See you in the enticing smile of a new-born See you in the impish grin of a toddler <o:p></o:p> See you in the breeze that soothes my face See you in the wind that blows very fast <o:p></o:p> Call this hallucination, fantasy; whatever; This is my inner world; that is the truth; Plain and simple ! <o:p></o:p> Tell me, Sri, how much you laughed on reading this "rambling" ! Love, Chithra. <o:p></o:p> |
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| |  dear Cheeniya, I did not know you can also write poetry....can't believe its ur first attempt!  so full of nature , loved your visualizations of the waves, rainbow and stars......wow , in fact every line. Actually a good one with a maturity and understanding about Love......wow! So will you keep us entertained with your poetry also! |
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| | Dear Chithra, That was a good attempt , inspired by Cheeniya! Where his was sounding like a matured Love, yours was like from a youngster! Will pass it to Rosh maybe,s he can use it with your permission! ha ha. But cute one....... |
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| | Sudha, do you not....know he is a 65 year old man whereas I am a young damsel!  Love, Chithra. |
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| | Dear Chithra It is so interesting that you still retain something that you wrote in your college days. I have heard that girls always keep and cherish everything that reminds them of their childhood and youth but this takes the cake! A good one indeed! Sri |
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| | Sri, you do not have....to appreciate me; but still, no pity on me?   How do you have the heart to tease me like this? Love, Chithra. |
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| | Dear Sudha And how can I thank you for those nice words of yours? You seem to be bent on making me a Shelly or Byron but you dont know that I am a tough nut to crack. But I must confess that such words encourage me to blabber some more! Dont you think mine is mature romance at its best? Sri |
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| | Sudha, really asking for a pat on his back ! Dont you think mine is mature romance at its best? Sri Poor old man - go ahead; do it more powerfully ! Love, Chithra. |
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| |  dear sri, who ever is waiting at the end deserves this and more, wonderful for a first attempt one more feather on my friends cap, and how many more am yet to see, the sea and waves and showers are all very pally to a poet they can trigger off their senses to bring out the beauty which they try to lay before you...the sun is very colorful along with the sky just before setting..wonderful..keep going..sunkan |
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| | dear chithra, yours is also equally wonderful here, nice read..sunkan |
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| | Thankyou, Sunkan.....atleast, you are appreciating me ! Sudha said, mine was a young girl's & cheeniya said, it was my younger days' ramblings ! So, special thanks, Sunkan. Love, Chithra. |
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| | Wonderful Cheeniya Sir! I hope the poetry bug has bitten you hard enough to the point that its impact is long-lasting. Just so we can have the opportunity to enjoy such good ones from you often! <?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p> I agree with Sudha that your poetry sounds more from a mature love point of view. While our equally deft poetess Chithra’s being more of a naughty and younger love. <o:p></o:p> To me, your poetry reflects sheer dedication and surrender to love where nothing comes even a close second to your supreme lover. Lovely. A huge compliment to the person you had in mind when you wrote this! <o:p></o:p> SS |
| Updated 10th March 2008 at 10:42 AM by SoaringSpirit |
| | you too chithmam, Looks like poetry is in the air. Your bubbly effervescence comes across your poetry. Both of you keep continuing. |
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| | Dearest Chithra, Wonderful piece! <?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p> Like I mentioned in my comment above to Cheeniya Sir, your poetry reflects a young and naughty love. Mind you, not childish love by any means! Your poetry reflects the bouncy spirit one experiences when they are in love. It reflects the youth that resides in each one of us regardless of age. Loved the young spirit in your poetry! <o:p></o:p> Please continue to infuse us with such enthusiasm and youthfulness through your poetry. We so want it and we need it! SS |
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| | Dear Cheeniya, Definitely you need a pat on your back....if you can reach your back, you do it yourself, or you can call this person to whom you have decicated so much Love and ask for a PAT ( he he he......  )But really a good one, rightly like you said Shelley or Byron! I feel ashamed that i was a Litt student and dont remember all these poets whom i had studied day and night , analysed to get good marks....sad! But enjoyed! And Chitra, see even SS says that yours had a bubbly feel....thats what i meant....very happy, romantic, and free( no commitments, kind of love, right!) But good one....Sariyana potti!  |
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| | Shan dear, you & AC write no more prose...but only poetry ! So, you are making me blabber as well - hold ony yourself responsible! You write Both of you keep continuing. Oh, Shan, when it comes to wrting prose or poetry, I am no match to the Senile Old Man - as SS has written I am still young, naughty, bubbly etc !! I need to grow a little "more old" ! Thanks, Shan. Love, Chithra. |
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| | Dear SS, you make me feel....that you want me to write "young" to balance Cheeniya's "old" !! Thank God, atleast nobody commented that mine is a "puppy love" poem ! So far, so good. To be honest with you, Double S, my age has started taking a U turn, ever since I started interacting with youngsters in IL ! So hold yourself responsible, if I do not act my age, but write "young, naughty, bouncy..." etc. You have all made me very happy, inspite of the old man teasing me ! Love, Chithra. |
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| | Dear Sundari A wow to you! Your FB itself sounds like poetry. Everyone in IL knows how creative you are and no wonder you write poems with such ease. I am happy that ILites are able to make something out of my lines and appreciate it too! Dont be surprised if all this appreciation goes to my head and I load you more with such stuff! Sri |
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